It's the end of the day again, but I've had a part of a poem brewing for most of it.
It actually comes from my first poem because after posting the end of the poem, the line "dogeared by an admirer" has been driving me crazy because I want to change admirer to lover. And "dogeared by a lover" is a set of words so appealing to me, I just decided to write a new poem around it instead.
Two poems in two days puts me right on track to meeting my National Poetry Month Challenge goals!
This poem turned out differently than I thought it would when I started it, and I had a number of false starts. I was interrupted at least 3 times for just the first two lines, but a little bit of persistence and a phrase that wouldn't leave me alone, made way for a finished poem before bed.
I like that it could almost work as a metaphor for reading, but works just as well as a traditional love (lust?) poem. At least, that's how I feel about it minutes after finishing it. I considered calling it "If You Fall" or "When You Fall" as the idea of "May you always fall" could be misconstrued as a wish for this to be a constant state of being, where I mean it only as -- if you're going to have this experience, may it always be like this. Is there a quick, poetic way to title that? Obviously, I don't know, yet. And I could be over thinking things.
These are things I can sort out later, after NPMC, though.
I hope you enjoy. Good night (and good luck with your own writing adventures!)
NPMC Poem 2:
"Collision"
May you always fall
from a shelf of anticipation
and shudder as the rapid breeze
sweeps through your heart
all your parts tumbling, colliding
twisting in exaltation with another
as your plummet becomes a duet
and just as you reach exhaustion
collapse in a pile of bliss
left weathered and caressed
and dogeared by your lover
It actually comes from my first poem because after posting the end of the poem, the line "dogeared by an admirer" has been driving me crazy because I want to change admirer to lover. And "dogeared by a lover" is a set of words so appealing to me, I just decided to write a new poem around it instead.
Two poems in two days puts me right on track to meeting my National Poetry Month Challenge goals!
This poem turned out differently than I thought it would when I started it, and I had a number of false starts. I was interrupted at least 3 times for just the first two lines, but a little bit of persistence and a phrase that wouldn't leave me alone, made way for a finished poem before bed.
I like that it could almost work as a metaphor for reading, but works just as well as a traditional love (lust?) poem. At least, that's how I feel about it minutes after finishing it. I considered calling it "If You Fall" or "When You Fall" as the idea of "May you always fall" could be misconstrued as a wish for this to be a constant state of being, where I mean it only as -- if you're going to have this experience, may it always be like this. Is there a quick, poetic way to title that? Obviously, I don't know, yet. And I could be over thinking things.
These are things I can sort out later, after NPMC, though.
I hope you enjoy. Good night (and good luck with your own writing adventures!)
NPMC Poem 2:
"Collision"
May you always fall
from a shelf of anticipation
and shudder as the rapid breeze
sweeps through your heart
all your parts tumbling, colliding
twisting in exaltation with another
as your plummet becomes a duet
and just as you reach exhaustion
collapse in a pile of bliss
left weathered and caressed
and dogeared by your lover
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